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Special delivery II - Episode 3
Oh my god sorry yes its' late, it's 5am here, pulled an all nighter. I had to redo a few scenes with clipping in them, and I had some hard choices to make with the narration - like completely binning any reference to Jenna's new figure, because half the damn dialogue was "how are you so thicc now?! why are you so thicc? - when are you so thicc? and so on.. just assume the containment team did something.
Plus 76 pages is a *lot* to narrate in Photoshop when you have dyslexia, I know there's gonna be a typo somewhere. Really need to allow 2 days for narration in future.
Without further ado. You can Read it here >>
Read it here
Maybe some of you are expecting faster... development? but please renember special delivery 1 was a slow burn too, barely any bump at all in part 1 - Also this one isn't a 3 part story, more like 5 or 6 - so it's about to kick off. Stay tuned. next episode Jenna goes pop. Something freaky will happen to Dylan. and the Containment Team returns, determined to put a stop to all this sort of thing.
I want to preface this by saying that i loved the general feel of this episode, and i do not have any problem with Dylan's appearance, but it's not the direction i was hoping it would go.
Not sure what i really hoped for, but to me i would have liked Jenna to have been bigger when she eventually opened the door, preferably with some ripped clothes as she grew considerably larger. Dylan would have been shocked at how large Jenna was, and he would join her in her dorm to "help" with whatever was going on with Jenna, as if Jenna didn't have full knowledge of what was going in with her.
That being said, i like that you are broadening your horizons and involving male characters, as much as i would have prefered this to be a Jenna solo adventure, or her being joined by another female. Jenna giving birth two 4, two of them go for Jenna's friend, and two of them go for Jenna once again.
What i will also say that whatever: "freaky will happen to Dylan" i hope it's not genderbending. Not because i don't like genderbending, but because i feel like it would take up a large part of the episode, and would subtracks from what is going in with Jenna. I still hold out hope that jenna becomes so big that she becomes immobile, and maybe Dylans cum kicks Jenna pregnancy into overdrive.
Again, we are judging before the story is complete, which i find unfair. But it's apparent that Jenna is a big favourite.
I also hope that "normal" Jenna returns, because while this hyper sexual Jenna is fun and makes what happens in the episode believable, it can also get a bit stale real quick and some of the stuff i loved the most from the first story was how Jenna eventually just accepted what was happening to her.
It's mystifying how much attention the guy is getting. He is not a focal character - his face appears maybe 5 times, he is there to give Jenna hot couples sex. I Really *Really* want to move on from discussing him and focus on important things - like Jenna.
Great work! Do you have a timeline when you release your stories? For instance once a week? Just curious.
I'll be posting an update tomorrow!
You mean today?
Great work with this and many other things that you have created. Honestly happy to see something out there that actually has a little more than “insert block “A” into slot “B” (make sexy bumpy bump)” honestly I like a plot to a story
Your art is amazing. I’ve never seen such sensualized pregnancy and super pregnancy. I think you are really on to something. In fact it’s some of the nicest work I’ve ever seen. I think you could make a full time lucrative a career out of it. That said, I do find your male characters very feminine and creepy. I’ve got no issues with including men in the action, but in their current form I find them distracting.
When she gets frustrated and says "You can't possibly be this bad at reading women" I remember when I was 19 and I had a thing for a really cute (and busty) redhead that whipped off her shirt and bra in front of me.. Yeah, I totally just thought she was making fun of me and couldn't figure out why she didn't want to talk to me much after that.
So yes, yes he could.