270926-beta


You guys didn’t like me cutting the Max date/sidequest – so I restored it, with some improvements.

Based on your feedback, I put the balcony and room service parts back in.  But I also tried to solve a bigger problem: a common piece of feedback is that my writing is hot until the sex starts.  So I tried to make the sex scene hotter than usual for the player.

Sorry this took so long.  It got much bigger than I planned or expected:
  • V1 of the Max sex scene was 13,189 words
  • V2: 7,908 words
  • V3, this version: 20,363 words

It’s also a lot more branched and reactive now: 215 passages (121 before), 291 link points (186 before), 323 conditionals (171 before). What I thought was just an edit turned into a major piece of work.

But the point wasn’t making it longer or wider.  I really tried to change the way I write these scenes – more player agency, less railroading the heroine, more focus on male/female energy, scenario and “tableaux”, and less of the shit I normally write about stiff/wet body parts and “waves of pleasure”.

If this worked, it matters beyond just this episode, because it means I’ve figured out an approach I can reuse in future sex scenes.

I’ve been staring at it way too long and I need fresh eyes, so: here’s the beta. Candidly: I pushed myself hard on this one, so I hope some of that comes through the screen.

If you play it, please tell me if it’s actually hotter than normal – or if I totally failed – here or on Discord.  🦀❤️‍🔥

FEMALE AGENT 270926 BETA