Do you guys like this story so far?

I can't really tell since I never get more than 4 or 5 likes and no comments. Is there any constructive criticism you guys have or is it fine the way it is?

Like I said before this is a story I've been wanting to tell for a long time now because it shows the first time Labrys gave a tentacle to someone else. It being Lavanna was supposed to imply that she's had one this whole time too. I've just never shown it because this story hadn't been made yet and I thought it wouldn't make sense without it.