Stop Talkin': The original comic script and art so far

So, if you're wondering what the original comic looked like and how far I went with it, here it is available for all to view!
It's not much, but the reason why I abandoned this version was because I was not happy with the storyline and my skillset at the time to execute it. The main thing I wanted to tackle was the storyline, because although it's in essence a smut comic, there are a few things that I ultimately wanted to tackle themewise. If I carried on with the original storyline I had back then, I would have failed with addressing the driving theme that sparked this comic in the first place; miscommunication. Plus, there was a plot-hole that I failed to address in Part 1.
The original vision for the whole series would have fallen flat. However, I'm glad that I've made peace with the original storyline, because it gave me the opportunity to reflect and improve on the way I construct comic stories. I've written stories before in prose and screenwriting form, but not sequential storytelling, and the reason why my previous two comics failed was because of my lack of skill to pull off such an unfamiliar medium. Failing a second time gave me the much needed perspective to know where my weaknesses lies.
So, enough rambling. Here is the original script for the first two issues/parts, and the comic so far for the first part. The new script is different, but similar in theme. I hope that you'll enjoy the new changes and the parallels to the original when the revised version is released đź’–
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PART 1: Comic so far
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PART 1 SCRIPT
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[Sonic texts a raunchy selfie to Shadow, inviting him to his place. Shadow says he's on his way]
Sonic: (Narrating) I don't exactly know what we have going on, Shadow and I.
It's…kinda complicated.
[Shadow opens the door to Sonic's apartment with a spare key, and walks in. Sonic is in the living room, lounging on the couch, ready for him.]
Sonic: (Narrating) Things were tense between us at first. But then…something clicked.
[Sonic puts his phone aside, giving him bedroom eyes. Shadow strides up to him, taking off his jacket and tossing it aside. They meet in a heated kiss.]
Sonic: (Narrating) Suddenly, we weren't rivals anymore.
Now…we just…
We're just relieving tension.
That's all.
[Sonic breaks the kiss to flick Shadow on the nose teasingly.]
Sonic: Took ya' long enough to get here, slowpoke.
Shadow: (Nipping Sonic on the shoulder) Hmmm, they say that good things come to those who wait. Are you wearing cologne?
Sonic: Mmm, yeah. You like it?
Shadow: I do. You smell nice.
[Shadow lifts Sonic up, and Sonic gleefully wraps his legs around Shadows waist.]
Sonic: Ah…and you smell like gunpowder. Long day at work?
Shadow: (Licking at Sonic's jawline) Mm…very long. So, so, long…
[Shadow's hand wanders to cup Sonic's ass, and Sonic nips at Shadows ear.]
Sonic: Ah…bedroom. Now.
Shadow: You don't need to tell me twice.
Sonic: Then what are you waiting for, slowpoke?
[They shuffle to the bedroom, and once there Shadow pushes Sonic up into the wall.]
Sonic: Ugh– getting a little rough now, big guy?
Shadow: And you're complaining? (He bites off one of his gloves and gropes at Sonic's crotch)
Sonic: Ahn…Mmm…nope. Might leave a Google review if– ah! –if I like it enough.
[Shadow thumbs down Sonic's slit, and Sonic's cock emerges. Shadow gives it a teasing pump.]
Shadow: There we go…
Sonic: H-hah! Shadow, you really aren't messing around, huh?
Shadow: (Kisses Sonic roughly, bites his lip) hmph… (He grinds his hips to Sonic's) Chaos do you ever shut up?
Sonic: (Throws his head back) Mmm. Nah. Got an image to uphold, p-part of my personal brand, y'know?
Shadow: (Grinds harder) Stop. Talking.
Sonic: (Smirking, he grabs Shadows face and pulls it to his own, ghosts his lips over Shadows) Make. Me.
[There is a dangerous glint in Shadow's eyes, and he lifts up Sonic and throws him to the bed. He climbs over Sonic, kissing him roughly, kicking off his shoes which clatter to the floor.]
Sonic: Now that's what I'm talking about!
Shadow: (Biting off his other glove) And that's the problem.
Sonic: (Taking off his own gloves) Mmm, and what's that?
Shadow: (Moving lower, holding onto Sonic's dick) You're still talking. (He then licks up Sonic's dick.)
Sonic: (Throws his head back, arching his back. Slight static) H-hah, fuck!
[Shadow smirks before taking Sonic fully in his mouth, and he sucks in earnest. Sonic writhes in pleasure, the static becoming more apparent. Sonic barely reaches over for the bottle of lube he has already on the bed.]
Sonic: S-Shadow I need you so fuckin' bad. Hmm…
[Shadow grabs the lube and doesn't hesitate with lubing up Sonic's hole. He bites Sonic's thigh as his fingers slide around Sonic's entrance.]
Sonic: A-Ah!
Shadow: Hm.
[Shadow begins prepping Sonic's entrance, one finger at first. Sonic is in bliss, bunching up the sheets in his fist. Shadow then puts in two fingers, and Sonic throws his head back.]
Sonic: Fuck!
[Sonic reaches down to stroke his own dick, but Shadow grabs his wrist and pulls Sonic's hand away. Shadow looks pleased while Sonic is starting to look desperate.]
Shadow: Tut, tut. I'm the one in control here, Hedgehog.
Sonic: Huff. Huff. C'mon Shads, quit playing and just– mmm –just get on with it, already!
[Shadow smirks, and pulls himself to kiss Sonic. His hand is still prepping Sonic.]
Shadow: Tell me…what's your favourite colour?
Sonic: W-wuh…what kinda question is that?
Shadow: Answer it.
Sonic: I-I dunno, red maybe? Black? Why are you asking?
Shadow: (Grinning mischievously) Oh, just giving you one last opportunity to form a coherent sentence.
Sonic: Huh?
[Shadow then puts both fingers in fully, brushing over Sonic's prostate, and Sonic sees stars. His legs twitch and Sonic bites his hand to muffle his scream.]
Sonic: Mmf…H-hah…
[Static in the air gets stronger, amplified when Shadow leans back to pour lube on Sonic's dick and then strokes his dick together with Sonic's. Shadow bites his lip as he stares half lidded eyes at Sonic. He stops stroking, takes his hands away from Sonic's. The static stops momentarily.]
Sonic: S-Shads…
[Shadow smiles, traces a finger up Sonic's cock, traces it up Sonic's belly, traces a thumb over a nipple, and goes back down Sonic's sides to lift up Sonic's leg. He lines up to Sonic's entrance.]
Shadow: Ready?
Sonic: Yes.
[Shadow pressed in, and the static is back with a vengeance. Sonic arches back, mouth open in a silent scream, tears beading up at the corners of his eyes. Sonic grasps at the sheets, and Shadow begins to move.]
[Montage of Sonic experiencing absolute bliss, static all around. Almost surreal. Their position switches and Sonic Shadow is touching him all over. Sonic reaches over and Shadow interlaces his fingers with Sonic's.]
Sonic: …close
[Shadow reaches down and strokes Sonic's cock with his thrusts, and Sonic cums. The static takes over. Sonic hits his peak in bliss. He comes down to Shadow cumming inside him, before collapsing on him to nuzzle into Sonic's cheek.]
Shadow: (reaching over to wipe a fallen tear from Sonic's cheek with a thumb) Did…did I hurt you?
Sonic: (holds Shadows hand to his cheek and closes his eyes) No
[Shadow sits up and goes to the ensuite, Sonic watching tiredly as Shadow grabs a towel]
Sonic: (Narrating) I don't know what we have.
[Shadow returns to clean up the mess on Sonic's belly]
Sonic: (Narrating) I don't know what we are.
[Shadow leans down to kiss Sonic tenderly. It's very loving.]
Shadow: Are you sure you're okay?
Sonic: Mmm…more than okay.
Shadow: Hn, that's good. As much as I'd love to stay when you're quiet like this, I've got to go.
Sonic: M'kay.
[Shadow gives Sonic one last kiss before gathering his stuff.]
Sonic: (Narrating) But whatever it is we have…
[Shadow gently closes the bedroom door, and Sonic is left alone on the bed. Sonic traces a finger to his lips, looking slightly somber.]
[Shadow walks down the hallway from Sonic's apartment, lifting up the collars of his jacket, his back only showing.]
Sonic: (Narrating) …it scares me.
End of Part 1

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PART 2 SCRIPT
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[At Sonic's apartment, inside Sonic's bedroom, bedroom window streams in light. Sonic comes into view as he sits up and is in the middle of riding Shadow.]
Sonic: Hah…you feel so fucking good…
[Sonic throws his head back, closes his eyes as he rides Shadow. Shadow brings his hands up to grip Sonic's waist.]
Sonic: Ah, fuck!
[Shadow slams Sonic down harder as his hips meet halfway. The static is back, and Sonic opens his eyes to stare at the ceiling. It's almost dreamlike.]
Sonic: (he's panting) Yes yes yes— A-ah!
[As they keep going, the static grows and grows. Montage of Shadow fucking into him, he pushes Sonic back to switch places, and Sonic is on his back, head hanging off the edge of the bed.]
Shadow: Hold on.
[Sonic tries his best to grip the sheets, but he arches his back as Shadow rams into him. The static is taking over, and Sonic let's his head hang back, mouth open in ecstasy]
Sonic: I'm close I'm close I'm— fuck fuck fuck!
[Shadow brings his hand to Sonic's cock and strokes him in time as he thrusts, and Sonic cums. The static takes over until it fades to black]
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[From black, the room fades back in. Sonic is on the bed properly, and Shadow is beside him wiping Sonic down with a damp towel during clean up.]
Sonic: Wha…?
Shadow: (kissing Sonic's chest and looking up at him) You blacked out. Blood rush to your head too quick?
Sonic: Is that what happened?
[Shadow puts the towel aside and leans back over to kiss Sonic earnestly, and Sonic melts into it, but then moves back to smirk at Shadow.]
Sonic: You're a lot more, uh, touchier than usual.
Shadow: (rolls his eyes) Stop talking.
[Sonic snickers but doesn't complain as Shadow gathers Sonic in his arms. Sonic lays his head on Shadow's chest, playing with the white chest fur, and Shadow hugs him back.]
[Sonic starts to fall asleep. The frame darkens as Sonic closes his eyes, until it's nearly faded to black.]
Shadow: I love you.
[Clarity. Sonic opens his eyes and he shoots up, looking at Shadow incredulously. Shadow is looking away, blushing, but there's a small smile there.]
Sonic: What did you just say?
[Shadow also sits up. His smile drops and he looks concerned.]
Shadow: I…I thought—
[Sonic runs a hand over his face as he sits on the edge of the bed, his back to Shadow. Sonic looks conflicted, nervous.]
Sonic: It's okay, it's kinda my fault. We should've talked about this.
Shadow: Talked about what?
[Sonic turns to face Shadow over his shoulder and gestures between them both.]
Sonic: About, y'know, us.
[Shadow at first seems visibly hurt, but then he looks away, pensive and blank faced.]
Shadow: So what are your thoughts?
Sonic: Well, I thought we were kinda under agreement that…well, that we're just uh relieving tension and what-not. You know. (He airquotes) "No strings attached."
Shadow: (nods, his hands clench to the sheets) Is that your assumption?
Sonic: I…yeah.
[Shadow closes his eyes, grip tightening in his clenched fists. His ears go back, but he sighs and returns to his pensive and blank self. His ears are still pointed back to show he's still affected.]
Shadow: I see.
[Shadow gets off the bed and starts to get dressed.]
Sonic: Shadow?
Shadow: (Putting on his gloves) I've got some paperwork to finish anyway. I'll see you next time.
[Sonic stands up from the bed as Shadow leaves.]
Sonic: W-wait, you're not gonna stay that night?
Shadow: Not tonight.
[Shadow closes that door, leaving Sonic alone in the bedroom. Sonic stares at the door for a while before he returns to bed and stares at the ceiling.]
Sonic: Fuck.
End of Part 2
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