Editorial Notes Thought Process to Revitalize. The Beauty and Beast Story
//Chapter1: https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1204896
//Chapter2: https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1213637
//Chapter3 alt ending1: https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1295371
//Chapter3 alt ending2: https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1273737
//Bonus Exotic Naughty Artwork:
https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1206143 https://subscribestar.adult/posts/1222028
Some of my behind the scene editorial notes and thought process to revitalize. The Beauty and Beast Story to further a kinky adaptation. Solid art directions and teamwork are need for any consistent story or pilot.
I have the pleasure of working with Hazel and EmeraldKnight to help make this all possible. Wonderful input/feedback. (Possible spoiler and outline a head)
Hello Hazel
Thanks for the edits. Story overall has a lot of fun and gratuitous amounts of sex. Thanks for hinting Beauty kink/book and also extending the way for next chapter 2 with the botch flower exchange.
As constructive criticism. We can encourage in between subtle but stronger character development/arc which will give actions scenes more impact later. Consequences and reactions for great story telling and drama. I think the detail of what the father got the two other sister was left out?
Character motives edits/suggestions for first part of chapter1.
Jude (Beauty's father) is a hard working caring father who wants to pamper his three daughters with luxury.
He once had a successful boating business but it was lost at sea?
Daughters Jessica and Sloane kept selfishly pressuring Jude to maintain that lifestyle.
Beauty didn't demand riches. She was more humble, empathetic, and loved her father to take more rest to recover, regardless of financial situation.
His hubris being a providing father and formerly successful business boat man blinded him in poorly dealing with Beast.
Nothing but the best for his daughters.
So Jude returns home, spending almost all his budget lavish gifts(fancy clothing/jewelry?) for the two girls as priority (Jessica, Sloane). They were ecstatic they got the best gifts, while Jude starts to apologize that he only got humble flower gift for Beauty. Beauty is still being appreciated. Gift's aren't necessary. Just glad Jude is home and gestures of flowers. Jude and Beauty lovely embrace. While Jessica and Sloane are standoffish and materialistic. Beauty being genuinely happy over something so little makes Jessica and Sloane fume, scoff at her being simpleton and not high class in taste like them.
Jude sheepishly continues his apology and horrible deal with Beast. After Beast's back was turned, Jude got a little greedy to please all his daughters. Thought he would harmlessly steal some roses on the way out after the deal. Unbeknownst to Jude, those were magically rare roses used by the Beast. Beast feeling swindled revealed his hidden fury/form. Forcing Jude or daughter to take the deal of being his prisoner/guest as punishment.
Regards, -StickyScribbles
With these new suggestions or apply motives. It feels things are more at stake and personal with these changes.
//With the current ending, it does work. It's serviceable, with Beauty asking about the curse out of the blue. Then chapter two explaining the curse as directed.
But I feel how it's approach is bit shoehorned in. Perhaps during the last few stages of their love making. In the back of Beauty's mind She's astonished how much power and stamina Beast has in bed compared to other men or what she read about. Beyond her wildest imagination, it drives her curiosity. Like how can such an enduring fantastical love beast exist?
Beast is flattered to hear this. But concedes that his strength is also a curse. Then it goes into next chapter 2 and they have their heart to heart talk on what happened. They navigate their relationship with more exploration with the kept and puppyplay.
While there is some Stockholm syndrome. Beauty has some daddy issues. Because her sister's Jessica and Sloane hog all the father's attention. So having Beast lovely take charge of Beauty in a kinky puppy play and fun way. Fulfills both her physical and emotional needs. It exceeds any of her books or her fantasy she read about. Beauty being kind, empathetic, and closet kinky. Is able to see beyond Beast's appearance to fall in love and also bypass greed/cursed clothing that tests her limits.
Those are my thoughts and suggestions. I'll go ahead and approve the next chapter 2 for us to be written alongside.
//Beauty and the Beast Story Outline 2
-Beast/Ben and Beauty continue to bond with elegant gatherings and kinky training/foreplay, to test and explore new boundaries together.
-It would ease some of Ben's hidden insecurity/anxiety of being stuck as a beast, guised under his dominant personality.
-Bens's heart and past was just as tightly guarded as his secret chambers.
Ben establishes rules together with Beauty to build up kinky affection, domaniance, trust, and submission.
Suggested Puppyplay rules by Ben.
-When Beauty is in puppyplay mode. Beauty encourages dog roleplay. Walk on all fours, bark, whimper, etc to communicate while exploring keep together.
-Obedient to commands while dressed as well as no uses of hands, but paws, and muzzle like a dog.
-While dressed in puppy gear, eat from designated food bowls labeled with her name.
-Rewarded with exotic belly rubs/pets/lap or kinky bondage dog crate play.
-Slowly that gave way to Beauty's compassion and puppy play walks together exploring the magical keep.
-She witnessed a struggling rose garden that continued to bloom alongside their love. -Fascinating libraries and gallery of untold tales.
-One story that caught her eye was a mural depicting a handsome man. Who was regretfully cruelly looking down upon those in need, as well as magical creatures. A fairy who was refused shelter during a storm, cursed the man with a beasty transformative collar as punishment.
-The cursed man was shown wallowing in sorrow and planting healing flowers to slow the curse. The sorrow reminded Beauty of lonely Beast/Ben.
-The tour often ended in a wonderful and loving tussle.
-Each day their happiness grew. However Beauty's mind began to wander with guilt after being separated from her family for so long.
-Ben in hopes to please her curiosity, show her a magical mirror to grant any sight in the world. (The mirror is also used by the fairy to monitor them, discreetly grant wealth/resources for Altruism behavior)
-It showed her two sisters were neglecting her overworked father, who was very sick.
-Beauty was distressed. Not being a doctor and having promised to always stay by Beast's side.
-Ben despite being lonely. Offer to set Beauty free, along with remains of his healing rose bush to save her dying father.
-Beauty was overwhelming and torn by the generosity. To save her father, but abandon her beastly lover. Would doom Beast with no remaining healing flowers for themselves.
-Beauty begged Beast with tearful eyes to save some healing flowers himself and to accompany her.
-However Beast was concerned that father would require all the medicine he could get just to survive and that his looks might frighten her father to death in their weakened statue.
-With that selfless gesture, and lover's tears. Magic boon. Suddenly the rose garden became bountiful. The beasty transformative collar curse was released, transforming Ben back to a handsome man.
-Both were overjoyed and embraced. They way through the magic mirror portal to save her father together before it was too late.
Regards, -StickyScribbles